Wednesday 13 May 2020
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Hello Charlie
ReplyDeleteI am impressed by the detail and rich vocabulary in this writing. Your use of personification is excellent and adds such vivd imagery. I love the snow "is like a blanket, engulfing me in its arms"...both simile and personification.
Very well structured and great work with paragraphs.
Keep up the neat, detailed writing.
Mrs Bennett
Hi Charlie,
ReplyDeleteWow, for a moment you took me far away from the kitchen table and all the chaos around me. I so hope you get to go on far away adventures to snowy lands in search of the mighty caribou.
Mrs Allan
Hi Charlie
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of writing your use of vocabulary is just outstanding. I hope you have been able to do some hunting. I know my Andy and Marty have found the waiting through lockdown to go hunting hard. Rylee is also so excited to be finally able to go for a hunt with them. Mrs Bayley
Hi Charlie
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of writing. It is very descriptive and paints a great picture inn my head. I like how you have described how hard it is to walk in the snow. I really enjoyed reading this piece of writing.
Blake
Hi Charlie,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great descriptive piece of writing. It really paints a picture in my mind even though there are no pictures beside the story until the end. This piece of writing made me want to read more when I got to the end.
Ma Te Wa
Isabel